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Matthew runs through the halls, caring you on his back. You where flapping your arms in all directions not caring about falling off, both laughing uncontrollably. You came up with a brilliant prank to pull on everyone at school. Since Matthews was “invisible” to everyone, or so you’ve heard, why not make everyone think there’s a girl flying around school? Perfect, no?

All eyes were on you, the halls filled with silence except for both Matthews and your laughter.                                    

“I-is …is she….. Flying?” someone mumble. You couldn’t help but laugh harder at this. You wish you could see their faces but sadly you couldn’t. You were blind. But that didn’t stop you from having fun.  It didn’t bother you thou, you’ve been like that your whole life. Matthew turned to an empty hall where he stop and let you down gently then opened and reached in his book bag. He pulled out a folding white cane, unfolded it and gave it to you. You smiled.


“No problem” he said with his usual shy low voice.

Matthew was your best friend, your only friend really, and he helped you around the school ever since you came here.  You don’t know why people don’t seem to notice him because he’s really a fun guy to be around with, even though his voice does seem to make him look like a shy person.

“Well, did they all buy it?”
“I guess, they all looked surprised” He chuckled.

“Awesome!” you shouted and leaped in victory. “Well what did I tell ya? Their all so stupid” you gave a wide grin. Just then you heard the bell ring and gave a little wave to the Canadian. “See ya later”
“Wait (name), I should help you-“he started but you ran off.

You didn’t like it when people offered you help in anyway. It made you feel…..useless.  You hate that feeling. Suddenly you heard foots steps coming your way. You felt your cane begging taken away from you. “HEY!”You shouted but the person was already gone. ‘Jerk’ you thought but it didn’t matter cause you could travel around even without it. You taught yourself to hear objects around you to “see”; the halls always seem to be making noises, so you made your way to your classroom.

You were just about to sit when you hear your teacher speak up “Students please welcome Lovino, he’s a new student here and-“you didn’t quite hear the rest, the female students around you started whispering to each other and you were interested on what they were saying. You heard many interesting things like

“wow! Look at him”

“He’s so handsome”

Now you were jealous, you wanted to see but that was impossible.  You wanted to know how he looked like, what made all of them say things like that. What is “handsome” anyways? It sounds like it was a good thing by their tones. Know you started wondering how YOU look like, were you this thing they called handsome? You doubt it. You spaced out for a while until you felt someone taping your shoulder and hear an unfamiliar Italian voice.

 “Ragazza, do you know what is the assignment were suppose to work on?”  He whispers to you not knowing what to do. you felt his breath tickling your neck, he was so close to you, you couldn't help but blush.You hear pages flipping and pencils writing around you. You must have been daydreaming or something for quite a while since you don’t remember the teacher giving you the assignment or even hear the stranger sit right behind you.

“I….umm…what was the assignment?”

“Idiota, I just asked you that. Whatever, never mind.” 

You chuckled nervously “sorry”.

-After school-

You tried to avoid Matthew at all cost once school was over. He would just freak if he saw you without your cane and you didn’t want that, he’ll just overreact like always, you didn’t want him to worry. Once you were far from school you felt a bit relaxed since they’ll be no way meeting up with him. You started humming your favorite song for a while until you bumped into something, more like someone. Impossible! How could they be so silent!

“Idiota! Are you blind or something!?”  You heard the same rude Italian from earlier. Wait…..he still didn’t figure out your blind.

“And why are you wearing those stupid sunglasses? It’s cloudy today, you even wore them indoors.”

He’s really unaware of your blindness. ‘Perfect’ you thought, maybe if you were to befriend him he won’t treat you like all the others, like if you were some helpless puppy.

“Oh, these?”You taped on your sunglasses “they make me look awesome, right?” You said with a smirk on your face, looking straight at him. oh great, now you sound just like that guy Gilbert. He rolls his eyes and looked away, blushing a little “right, of course they do” he replied sarcastically. Honestly, he thought you looked cute and didn’t want you to see him blushing. He blushed even more when you wrapped your arm on his. “HEY! WHAT ARE YOU-“

“Wanna go to the park?” you interrupted him. You dragged him off without him even giving you an answer.

 “Idiota, what makes you think I want to hang out with you!?” you shrugged “cause who wouldn’t?”

When you got there you immediately ran to the swing set, already knowing where they were located. You sat down on one of the swings, you felt proud of yourself, you honestly didn't looked like you were a blind chick trying to find her way around or so you think so you started to rock yourself back and forth with your legs trying to get up high. Lovino sat in the other empty swings besides you and stared "Careful, Don't hurt yourself". You frowned when those words came out of his mouth "You don't need to worry about me, OK?"

 He blushed “Why would I be worried over you? I just don’t want to sign any papers or buy a coffin when you bust your head open and die”

“Oh!” You laughed out “well you don’t have to worry about that either.”  You were now up high, a little too high but you liked feeling of the breeze hitting your face, you always imagined yourself flying off leaving all your problems behind. You even forgot you were with the Italian man.  Lovino watched you, not noticing he was smiling “you’re so childish”. His words brought you back to reality; you jolted in surprise causing you to fall off the swing. As you hit the ground you felt a sharp pain it you ankle.

 MA CHE CAZZO! COSA TI HO APPENA DETTO! ECCO, ORA SEI FATTO MALE ALLA GAMBA!”he shouted angrily but you didn't understand any of it. You gave a little whimper as he grabbed your ankle. “I think you sprained your ankle” he finally said, trying to help you up gently. “It’s okay it no big deal, see!” you tried walking it off but you really wished you had your cane with you right now.You stopped when you heard a cheerful voice and the sudden sound of tires screeching.

  “CIAO~” you heard an other Italian voice say. “Is that you Lovino!? You sound different, happy and not that grumpy tone of yours.” You chuckled. He gave you a confused yet angry face “What are you talking about? That was my fratello.”

“Brother” he translated.                                                                                                                                                                                                     
“Oh, sorry I didn't see him there”                                                                                                                                                                                     

“He’s......right in front off you” this time sounding concerned. “you must have hit your head too” he playfully hit your head almost making your sunglasses fall off. You felt a pair of hand grab yours, you blushed deeply. “ Hello there bella~”you were disappointed once you figured out it was his brother “I’m Feliciano , nice to meet you! Your very pretty too~ I think you’ll look beautiful without those glasses”you insisted but  he already took off your glasses and stared at your face for a while and his smile disappeared from his face. “What is it!?”you heard Lovino ask from behind you. It took a while for Feliciano to answer him. You started to tear up. He looks at Lovino with a straight face and opened his mouth to reply “she has very ugly eyes”. He giggles and immediately put your sun glasses back on you.

“WHY WOULD YOU SAY THAT, THAT NOT LIKE YOU AT ALL!” he sounded angry and walk right pass you to beat his brother.You heard Feliciano plea as you stood there in shock. Why didn't he tell Lovino?You snapped out of it when you heard his voice.

  “Hey, I’m taking you home get in the car”you were surprise by the sudden demand he gave you “I...uhh I can get home just fine it’s ok” you smiled nervously. He blushed, seeing you smile at him “not with that sprained ankle of yours” he pointed out and somehow got you in Feliciano car so you might as well gave him you address.

“you might want to put you seat belt for this ride.”he quickly advised.
“uh...sure” you put on your seat belt right before you felt like you were stuck on a roller coaster. Moments later they ride was over before you knew it. 

“That........WAS AWESOME!” you shouted and looking as if you leaped out of your seat.“That was scary” you hear Lovino say as he helped you out of the car. “Your just lame” you teased . “your just insane” he teased back, laughing.  

“well bella, see you soon”you heard feli say as he pulled you into a hug.  A chill went down you spin when he whispered in your ear “ Your secrets safe with me” right before Lovino decided he has hugged you long enough. He took your hand in his and lead you to your front porch. “You never told me you name”. How could you be so stupid!? You’ve been with him for the whole afternoon and never gave him your name! “(name)” you said cheerfully almost sounding like Feli. “well then (name) I guess I’ll see tomorrow” he gave a wave and walked off.  You stood there as you heard the car drive off then opened the door to your house and walked in.

“I’m home!”
“You don't have to shout! I’m right here! Are you blind or something!”  

 “y-yes.....I am” you were hoping your mother wasn't home, you hated her and she hated you back. You were actually calling your dog , ( dog’s name), he was trained to be your guide dog and you consider him more like family than your own mother.

“Well be glad you don't have to see your hideous face everyday” you were getting tired of her abuse words, this was one of the many harsh things she would tell you.

“get off my back you dumb bitch” you whispered to yourself yet she still heard it and threw the nearest thing to her at you. “DON'T YOU CALL ME THAT EVER AGAIN! GIVE ME SOME RESPECT, THE ONLY REASON YOUR ALIVE IS BECAUSE OF ME!” The object hit your sprained ankle, most of the pain was already gone but  has returned and you let out a screech of pain.

 “Serves you right” was the last thing she told you before she turned back to her soap opera that was on full blast. You remembered you had a spare cane near the door and reached out for it. you could walk much better with it now. You were glad when (dog’s name) came to you once you reached to stairs and help you up and to your room.You slammed your door shut not wanting anything to do with your mother. You went up to the mirror and put a hand on it. It was cold. Was it true what she said? Were you really hideous? You felt a tear go down your cheek. You made a fist and slammed  it against the mirror, smashing it into a million pieces. Your dog backed away and whimpered.  You plopped down on your bed and started to shed more tears.  (d/n) jumped up on your bed and laid down next to you as if he was telling  you ‘ I’m here for you’. You hugged him tight, he was  like your teddy bear, and then cried yourself to sleep letting all you pain and anger out.

well I think this could have been better, but it's the first facnfiction I ever made so dont hate TT^TT
I just wanted to see if i was good at it or not, so im asking you how can i improve.
tell me if you want me to countinue with this story of mine
hope you liked it ;w;
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PopstAhri Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, this is so cute. XD What is Romano saying when he is yelling? (MA CHE CAZZOCOSA TI HO APPENA DETTOECCO, ORA SEI FATTO MALE ALLA GAMBA) I tried to put it in Google Translate but I think the second half of the sentence didn't show up right. We can't really trust it, can we? ^^'
stevesgirl05 Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2015
Is there a second chapter?
StarBrightThePony Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
I have a link! Here :…
If you haven't found it. :)
SallyNight22 Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2015  Hobbyist Artist
oh dear. but this is a good story other than the evil bitch of a mother gonna read the next chapter now.
HawkflightOfThunder Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2015  Hobbyist Artist
How I would have walked back home:
“I’m home!”
“You don't have to shout! I’m right here! Are you blind or something!”  
"I was talking to the dog, whore!"

Oh my helicopter, the beginning :XD:
cancerleovirgo Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Okay that was stupid XD
AnimeKitty2014 Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2014
Can you write a part two cuz this was amazing and I would love to read more ^ ^
Nightcoregirl101 Featured By Owner May 24, 2014
The beginning though XD
ApplauseClapClapClap Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
It's like,
They see me flyin
They hatin
Because I'm Canadian and awesomer then Prussia
Nightcoregirl101 Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014
Yes, tbat comment needs an award
ApplauseClapClapClap Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Let the award be going to the Hetalia universe. Every Hetalian can come and they'll all be in their own Hetalia world so other Hetalians can't meet.

//and kill eachother over characters//
pomagranites Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2015  Student Writer
you made my day La la la la *Free Icon/Emote* Thank You Pusheen 
Nightcoregirl101 Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2014
iluv2camp99 Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Filmographer
Please write more of this story!
J3LLYSH3Y Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
I like my dog in the story and real life
RinKagamine696 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013
Were the same i also like my dog shes very active but since she had babies she became a little... Weak... But i still took care of her
neigma Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Student General Artist
Is there more?
C-L-A-Y Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013
Yes there is
neigma Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Student General Artist
Yay! Btw, love your icon!
MoonlitTigerfang Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013
:o Don't leave us all hanging~! We need to know how this romance turns oooouuuuuuut~!
C-L-A-Y Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013
There is a second chapter you know xD
SwaggerJr Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2014  Student General Artist
Rigi-san Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
“she has very ugly eyes”

THAT MADE ME CRACK UP SO HARD. :iconasdfghplz:
C-L-A-Y Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013
xD yeah i re-read it and i forgot al about it
JasminoCat Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
DUDE!!! This is AWESOME! Please continue, PLEASE!!!!!
SomeOrdinaryArtists Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Kimsters-Pictures Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Student General Artist
This is the u should Mage a part too
xXxhypermonsterxXx Featured By Owner May 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Heh heh I would love to do that prank in real life! :iconawwwplz:
moot3100 Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
CryThePainAndSorrow Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013
I think you should continue!
applecows Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013
Moar please!
aplbunny Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
CONTINUE!!!! please? ^^ I like it and would love to see how the story pans out ^^
pinkacheer Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
FefeKik Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
MA CHE CAZZO! :'D This is actually right... Italians swear like that. XD
COSA TI HO APPENA DETTO! ECCO, ORA SEI FATTO MALE ALLA GAMBA! maybe you should say "Cosa ti avevo detto! Ecco, ora ti sei fatta (Reader is female) male alla gamba!
But this is one of the best Italian translations I've seen :'D Anyway, continueeeee!!! And you can ask me if you need translations ;) (I've seen the comment behind just now. I can be called a translator? Woooow XD I am just a random Italian with an obsession for Hetalia xD)
Wow. He talked about accents. I don't know, some people add an -a to some words (like "It's-a me, Mario!") but it's not a big deal in my opinion (talks the one that roleplays Prussia and never adds an accent xD)
Wow. I just started corretting, but I didn't tell you, you are great! Continue!!! ;)
And you can call yourself a writer. You wrote, you are not the best but you will improve! Go ahead! :D
C-L-A-Y Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013
xD Thanks!your Italian :D awesome
well it'll be nice working with you translator =w=
FefeKik Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Yeah :D
And it will be nice being your translator~ xD
Sephericcharm Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
SharonaIsCool Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
BreezyTheNinjaBoss Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Student General Artist
:iconmoarplz: No! Don't leave it at this! Please continue!
Cyan-Silver Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I REALLY hope you continue this story! It's very entertaining and I like this topic :D
C-L-A-Y Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
thanks a lot!
Cyan-Silver Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome! :aww:
GoddessofInvestment Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Please please please continued!!!!!
FarDreamr Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
make :iconmoarplz:
C-L-A-Y Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
xD sure
MewChero Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
I want more of this<3
animelovea Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Student Writer
Hi there!

This was very good! I loved it! I can't wait to see what happens!

First, some compliments.

First thing, foreign words. Definite bonus points for that. Good work there.

Second, the story was amazing! You started with something fun to drag the reader in, and eventually led to meeting the other main character. Points for that as well.

Third, you kept the characters in character. More bonus points!

Now, since you asked how you could improve, I'm going to tell you how! :D

The first thing I wish to point out is that some of your dialog lines weren't double-spaced, which I'm assuming is what you were going for.

Second thing, I noticed that you switched tenses. You went from Present to Past.

The third thing I noticed was that there were some grammatical errors.
-1) You didn't capitalize a few words. Remember to capitalize the first word in the sentence.
-2) If you plan to continue the sentence after a quote, you need to make sure that there is a comma after
the phrase. (Ex. "'Just stay away from me,' Arthur stated before walking away from the Frenchman, a tear falling from his left emerald eye as he took his immortal steps on the light gray sidewalk.")
-3) Also staying on the topic of quotes, when a quote is the end of a sentence, you put the corresponding punctuation mark inside the quote. (Ex. "Alfred picked up a Manga labeled 'Kuroshitsuji' and looked at Kiku, gesturing the book he held. 'Dude, is this any good?'")
-4) When writing for 2 or more characters, it is VERY important that you separate a character's actions and speeches. When one character speaks, they get a paragraph to themselves, but when another character does something, they also get their own paragraph, unless a characters action influences another character's. (Ex. "'Of course I'll, like, totally go out with you Tori,' Feliks said, causing his new boyfriend, Toris, to tear up." After that, Toris' actions would be in a new paragraph. Let me know if this part doesn't make sense.)
-5) Commas can be injected here and there to allow better sentence flow, but I won't get into that.
-6) The words "but" and "and" generally do not start sentences. The only exception is for dialog.
-7) You forgot to put in a few periods here and there, but I won't get into that either.
-8) Some of the sentences were awkwardly worded. I suggest that you say them out loud if you get the slightest hint that the sentence is awkwardly stated.

Fourth on my list was that you didn't use any accents, which can irritate a lot of fangirls. Including me. So I suggest you go online or something and find out what the Italian accent is, and it's also recommended that you do that for any accent you don't know.

Fifth thing is that you used foreign words, which gets you bonus points, but didn't include translations. For example when I read '“MA CHE CAZZO! COSA TI HO APPENA DETTO! ECCO, ORA SEI FATTO MALE ALLA GAMBA!”,' I was confused because I don't speak/read Italian. So, it is also recommended that you put in translation notes, even when the translations are stated in the story.

Number six was that you didn't state how old the characters in the story were. This isn't a big deal, but it can lead to a lot of confusion.

Seven! There weren't a lot of details in there, which, in my opinion, would have made the story better. However, there are writers who think that writers should just provide the backbone of the story and leave the rest up to the reader's imagination. If you are one of those writers, feel free to forget this one.

That felt like a lecture! :iconotlplz: I'm sorry about that and making it so long.........

Anyways, that's all I noticed throughout it, but it was still pretty good. I would like to see where you go with this!

Last thing, if you want me to edit for you, just let me know, I'm always open to doing so.

I hope you continue writing in the future!

- ~animelovea
C-L-A-Y Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
dont worry ^^' I asked if you can give me advice and you did so THANKS! I'll try to remember all that next time and its my first time writing a story like this so yeah, thanks for the tips and I'll love for you to edit it for me when ever you get the chance

oh and "MA CHE CAZZO! COSA TI HO APPENA DETTO! ECCO, ORA SEI FATTO MALE ALLA GAMBA" means "what the fuck!look what you've done know, you hurt your leg!" or at least that's what google told me :3
animelovea Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Student Writer
No problem, always glad to help out a fellow writer!

And I'm always open for editing, so if you have a story you would like me to edit, just send it in a note or something and I'll get it back to you as soon as possible. Also, if you would like notes saying what I edited, to help set things in stone, I can do that as well.

I have a quick question. Did you use Google Translator or do a Google search for some translators?
C-L-A-Y Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
Google translator ;3; was that a bad thing ?
and i wouldn't call myself a writer just yet
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